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Fic: What Was Your First? (NCIS)

Title: What Was Your First?
Author: kaylashay
Rating: FR13
Disclaimer: I'm not Bellesario or CBS, so I don't claim to own them.
Challenge: ncis_drabble; Challenge #74 - Body
Word Count: 300

Crossposted: ncis_drabble; ncisfanfic; ncis_haven; tonydinozzo

Summary: When she asked him the question, Tony couldn't lie to her.

Usually when he was asked the inevitable ‘getting to know the new guy’ question, he responded with what they wanted to hear. It was a gang member wanted for rape and one of his victims reached him before they did. It was a hit and run, the victim was in their early twenties and now they were looking for a red mini-van based on paint markings and witness statements. It was a little girl who died as he held her hand when they arrived too late for the domestic dispute call.

He had a bag full of stories to answer the question. He would judge the person asking and tell them exactly what they wanted to hear. Some wanted to hear how his first had been a criminal he had taken down permanently while still a patrol officer. Others wanted to hear how seeing the dead body of a child had made him into the detective he was today. None of them wanted to know that he had been touched by death before he had ever thought about strapping on a gun and a badge. None of them that is until he was introduced to Abigail ‘Call Me Abby’ Sciuto. One look at her, and the truth came spilling out.

“I was eleven years old. I remember this argument about not wanting to wear a sailor suit anymore and then there was this loud noise. I don’t really remember what happened then, not until this voice was asking me if I could hear him. When I said yes, he started telling me how they were working to get me out of the car. I don’t really know when I noticed, but I finally did. My mother was just lying there over top of me, not moving. She was my first.”

Comments

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citymusings
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:32 am (UTC)
*applauds* Very nicely done.
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:36 am (UTC)
Thanks! These 300 word fics are fun yet challenging to write.

:-)
mylogiceatsyou
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:38 am (UTC)
Poor Tony.

Really nicely written.
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:41 am (UTC)
Thanks! Yeah... Tony is just sitting there waiting to be picked on by us writers. Poor guy.
emony2
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:42 am (UTC)
oh, ouch. Nicely done.
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:44 am (UTC)
Thanks for the nice remark, and sorry for making you go 'ouch'. Of course, according to Gibbs, I shouldn't apologize because it's a sign of weakness.
emony2
Feb. 25th, 2008 01:38 am (UTC)
lol! No worries and no need to apologise... and that rule of his is something I could learn from - apparently I apologise far too often - a habit I get from my Mum. ;)
ksl2025
Feb. 25th, 2008 02:43 am (UTC)
Wow
For such a short little piece, it definitely had a huge impact. Nice. The set up was perfect...just made the truth that much more powerful when Tony tells Abby about his first.
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 02:58 am (UTC)
Re: Wow
Thanks!!

I think I'm getting better at these 300 word fics because I was only off by 1-2 words at the end of it that I had to go back and fix.

Abby has a way of getting people to talk I think and I think she knows more about Tony than most do.

Glad you liked it!
thelilyqueen
Feb. 25th, 2008 04:02 am (UTC)
Re: Wow
Abby does indeed have that way about her... must be her basically sweet and nonjudgmental nature. Makes you feel like she'd be understanding about almost anything.
xdawnfirex
Feb. 25th, 2008 12:11 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow. That's a punch to the gut, that is.
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 11:52 pm (UTC)
I'll try to pull my punch next time. ;-)

Glad you liked!
strangevisitor7
Feb. 25th, 2008 03:42 pm (UTC)
Really packed a punch!
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 11:57 pm (UTC)
That'll teach you to duck when reading... ;-)

:-)
chatona
Feb. 25th, 2008 08:51 pm (UTC)
Gorgeous. And rather painful *sighs happily*
kaylashay
Feb. 25th, 2008 11:57 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
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